Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opionion.
There is an ongoing debate
whether
visitors should follow local Change preposition
about whether
people
's habits. Some people
believe that visitors should obey the local lifestyle, while
other
argue that the host country should be more inclusive to foreigners. Fix the agreement mistake
others
This
essay agrees with the first view.
Follow
the local customs and behaviour is a basic way of showing respect to the local residents. Different places have different cultures, including their language, lifestyle, Wrong verb form
Following
religon
, and so on. If foreigners do not follow these, they might be violating local taboos. The locals' daily life would Correct your spelling
religion
also
be bothered by these behaviours, and this
is really impolite to the local people
. For example
, some tourists bring alcohal
and drink it on the street when they Correct your spelling
alcohol
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travel
a
muslin country, which can really influence the locals' life.
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However
, some individuals strongly believe that the host country should welcome the
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people
with different cultural background
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backgrounds
,
because the whole world is a big family and it is important to allow different ethnic Remove the comma
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people
to communicate and show their own customs to others. Despite this
, it does not mean that we should show other people
our culture and lifestyle in their land. Also
because of this
, as visitors, obeying the locals
habits and laws could motivate us to better understand Change to a genitive case
local's
locals'
another ethnic groups
. Replace the adjective
another ethnic group
other ethnic groups
For instance
, it might be a great pity if we do not go to pub
to read Add an article
the pub
a pub
newspaper
with local Add an article
the newspaper
a newspaper
eldly
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elderly
people
and do not try fish and chips with a pint of beer in
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at
the
dinner time when we Correct article usage
apply
traveling
the UK.
In conclusion, tourists should follow the local Change the spelling
travelling
people
's customs. Although
being more welcome and inclusive to vistors
could be Correct your spelling
visitors
benefical
to cultural communication, obeying and experiencing Correct your spelling
beneficial
the
their life habits is Remove the article
apply
basic
way to show our respect to local residents and to understand their culture.Add an article
a basic
the basic
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The essay provides a complete response to the task and clearly discusses both views regarding the topic.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are both present and provide a clear framework for the essay.
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Good use of examples, such as the one about tourists drinking alcohol in Muslim countries, supports your arguments well.
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