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The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should * GDP (Gross Domestic Product) is the total value of goods that are made and services that are provided in a country.

The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should * GDP (Gross Domestic Product) is the total value of goods that are made and services that are provided in a country.
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The bar chart gives
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information
of
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 how much money was spent on health care as
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 respective GDP of eleven nations in Europe in the year 2002, 2007 and 2012.
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, it can be observed that there are disparities among the European countries and a lot of fluctuations
ocurred
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occurred
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 the decade.
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, the changes were not massive. It is interesting to note that Switzerland and Belgium spent the most portion of their economic production throughout, 11% and 10% respectively.
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 other countries,
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 as Estonia and Spain,
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 had a constant expenditure which did not change at all, the former spending the least amount of their GDP on health, just 2.5%.
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, expenditures on
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 sector decreased in Denmark, Lithuania, Norway, Poland and Slovenia by 1%

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Health expenditure
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • Percentage increase/decrease
  • Trend
  • Stability
  • Fluctuation
  • Economic factors
  • Healthcare priorities
  • Public spending
  • Comparative analysis
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