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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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A glance at the given pie charts depicts the proportion of
water
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 usage for several goals in six different
continents
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.
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, the highest level of
water
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 consumption is related to agricultural use in all of the
the
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mentioned
continents
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 except North
America
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 and Europe.
In addition
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, the lowest
rate
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 of
water
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 usage does not follow a logical trend. As mentioned, the most significant proportion of
water
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 utilization belongs to the agriculture sector in four
continents
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, a staggering 88%, 84%, 81%, and 71% in Central Asia, Africa, South East Asia, and South
America
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, respectively.
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, the lowest
rate
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 of
water
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 utilization takes place in industrial use in these four highlighted countries.
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, the smallest level of
water
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 consumption in comparison with the other
continents
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 occurs in Central Asia at a negligible 5%.
On the other hand
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, in the rest of the
continents
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, the highest
rate
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 of
water
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 is used in industrial use.
Hence
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, people who live in South
America
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 and North
America
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 utilize
water
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 for domestic activities at the lowest
rate
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 compared to other
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activities
activitie
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activities

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, continents, america, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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