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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and repording the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and repording the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the
amount
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 of
households
 in living places that were rented and owned in Wales and England from 1918 to 2001.
Households
 owned
accomodation
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accommodation
accommodations
were experienced
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a
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growth from 1918
untill
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until
 2010. The
avrage
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average
 of
households
 rented
accomodation
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accommodation
 were
on the contrary
 and felt from 1918 to 2001. The
amount
 of
housholds
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households
 in owned and rented categories in 1917
were
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was
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 the same by 50%.
After
this
 year
households
 in owned sharped more than 65%
however
, in 2011
this
amount
felt
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fell
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 by less than 65% which was not more. From 1918 the
amount
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number
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 of
housholds
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households
 in rented
were
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was
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 more than 75% but decreased
untill
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until
 2001by 30 per cent but
this
amount
 has
a
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apply
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slowley
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slowly
growth
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grew
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 in 2011 by more than 35%.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, households with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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