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you recently brought an electronic product froma store.and found that the product is not working properly.write a letter to store manager.In your letter. Complain about the problem,proposed action for the store to take and ,request confirmation that this regard.

#product #froma #store #manager #action #request #confirmation
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to complain
you
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to you
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 that a malfunctioning television
purchased
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was purchased
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 on 21 Sep 2024. I purchased the TV namely LG 001 from
branch
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a branch
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 located in Surrey City Center. The
product
 was
well functioning
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 at the time of purchasing. After several
day
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days
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 of purchasing the TV started to make trouble like uncontrol power off and on after
each
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every
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 10 minutes. I am eligible for a replacement
that is
same
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the same
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 as
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the previous
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previous
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previous one
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. The issue occurred without any reason and in fact it did not occur
due to
 my fault. As per the warranty conditions of the
product
, a new TV
instead
 of
old
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the old
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product
to
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is to
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 be provided by the company to
customer
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the customer
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. If you are in compliance with
this
 request, please inform me via
in writing
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email
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 to
email
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the email
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 address provided on
invoice
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the invoice
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 at your convenience to
handover
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hand over
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 the
product
 to the store and obtain a new one. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully Aravinda Jayaweera
Submitted by aravindasajith on

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suitable writing tone
Consider proofreading for minor grammatical errors, such as 'brought' instead of 'bought' and 'trouble like uncontrol' instead of 'trouble like uncontrolled.' This can enhance the writing tone and avoid any misunderstanding.
complete response
Include more specific details about the malfunction (e.g., how it impacts your viewing experience) to give a complete response.
single idea per paragraph
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea, and link your ideas to improve overall cohesion. For example, the paragraph detailing your proposal could directly follow the problem description.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are polite and appropriate for the context.
task achievement
You've clearly stated the problem and provided relevant background information.
logical structure
The letter is logically structured, making it easy to follow your points.
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