What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? Give reasons for your answer and give any relevant example or experience you have to support your answer.

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a part in work satisfaction are work-life balance and intrinsic factors. It can
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task achievement
Try to develop your ideas more fully. You have mentioned work-life balance, but you need to provide more explanation and examples to support your points.
coherence cohesion
Add an introductory paragraph to clearly state the topic and your main argument. Additionally, a conclusion to summarize your points would help improve the essay structure.
task achievement
Your essay starts with clear topics such as work-life balance and intrinsic factors, which are relevant and understandable.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Intrinsic Factors
  • Extrinsic Factors
  • Work-Life Balance
  • Alignment with Personal Values
  • Job Security
  • Flexible Working Hours
  • Remote Work Options
  • Recognition
  • Personal Achievement
  • Opportunities for Growth
  • Supportive Work Environment
  • Company Policies
  • Realistic Expectation
  • Entry-Level Jobs
  • Senior-Level Positions
  • Fulfilled
  • Satisfaction
  • Flexibility
  • Personal Life
  • Internal Motivation
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