The charts below show the percentage of male and female students of different age groups who studied in Australia for full-time and part-time education in 2006.

IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below show the percentage of male and female students of different age groups who studied in Australia for full-time and part-time education in 2006.

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Bar chart illustrates the percentage of students that have been

studing

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studying

for full and

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part

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part-time

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time

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, the chart is divided by age groups and genders. For the

males

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male's

males'

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side,

Full

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Full-time

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time

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students rate

start

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starts

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with

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12% for 15-19

ages

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and reach

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apply

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its peak

with

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40% for 20-24,

than

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then

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get much lower for 25-29 and 30+ it gets as low as only 8%,

hoever

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however

for the

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Part

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Part-time

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time

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student is kind of steady in comparison, it moves between 6 to 12

percent

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per cent

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along the different

ages

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Moreover

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, in the second side of the illustration, which represents the females,

its

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it's

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simillar

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similar

, but has a

little

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few

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changes, for

instant

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instance

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full

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full-time

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time

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is quite higher in the young

ages

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, but

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part

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part-time

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time

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is lower in the older students.

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, the

ages

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15-24 tend to have

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part

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part-time

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time

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education for

bith

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both

genders,

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the

othe

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other

hand, 25-30+

ages

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prefer

full

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full-time

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time

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words part, time, ages with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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3
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
23
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

148 words

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The charts below show the percentage of male and female students of different age groups who studied in Australia for full-time and part-time education in 2006.

You have arranged to visit a friend in England but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • explain the important event • apologise for the situation • suggest a new arrangement

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