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You work part-time at a company. Your manager is asking all part-time staff about a new work schedule. One option is working Monday, Wednesday, and Friday from 1:00 p.m. to 6:00 p.m. The other option is working Tuesday, Thursday, and Saturday from 10:00 a.m. to 3:00 p.m. Choose the option that you prefer. Why do you prefer your choice? Explain the reasons for your choice. Write about 150-200 words.

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Personally, I consider that working on Monday, Wednesday, and
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Friday
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friday
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Friday
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 from 1:00pm to 6:00pm is more convenient than working on Tuesday, Thursday, and
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Saturday
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saturday
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Saturday
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 from 10:00am to 3:pm since it is benefitial for the staff.
Firstly
, the option A balances work and personal commitments as it aligns with both, on one hand it allows you being productive during the week in a flexible schedule;
on the other hand
, people can enjoy weekends with their families.
Secondly
, commuting to work would become easier at 1:00pm than 10:00am since there are not rush hours within
this
 time stamp.
As a result
, the stress to be on time at the job or suffer any unforseen situation on the route would impact positively. Considering these reasons, I strongly belive that working
according to
 the option A is the most suitable alternative for me.
However
,
this
 is only my personal opinion and I will respect whichever decision my collagues would make. Thanks for giving me the opportunity to express my views.
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language
Ensure consistency in capitalization and punctuation throughout the essay. For example, 'Friday' instead of 'friday' and 'from 10:00 am to 3:00 pm' instead of 'trying 10:00am to 3:pm'.
writing
Enhance the conclusion by summarizing your main points succinctly and reaffirming your preference. This will create a stronger ending.
content
Good use of specific examples to support your reasoning, such as commuting during non-rush hours and having free weekends.
structure
The essay logically flows and each paragraph addresses a specific point, making it easy to follow.

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