The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 qnd 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 qnd 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
The pie chart illustrates the number of export income for different goods
while
the table gives information about the percentage of value change for each goods in 2015 and 2016 at a particular state. It is clearly seen from the chart that export earnings from all sectors, except
gems
and
jewellery
, increased in 2016.
Similarly
, the table shows that the value of all sectors, except
gems
and
jewellery
, grew compared to 2015. The chart shows that only
gems
and
jewellery
faced a decrease in export income with a dropped around $2 billion.
Conversely
, both manufactured and textile products increased notably with approximately $4-5 billion.
Similarly
, petrol-based and agricultural goods
also
increased but at a lower number at around $2-3 billion.
Likewise
, the table displays that the only category that decreased in value was
only
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gems
and
jewellery
with 5.18%.
On the other hand
, fabrics and engineered products saw the highest increase with 15.24% and 8.5%, respectively.
Similarly
, petroleum and agriculture-based products
also
grew at a slightly lower rate of 3% and 0.81%, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gems, jewellery with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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