the pie charts shows the comparison of differetn kinds of energy production of france in 1995 adn 2005

the pie charts shows the comparison of differetn kinds of energy production of france in 1995 adn 2005
The Pie graphs illustrate the contrast
of
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different categories of
energy
production (
Gas
,
petro
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petrol
, coal, nuclear and others)
of
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France in 1995 and ten years later.
Overall
, the proportion of
gas
,
coals
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coal
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, nuclear and other unnamed
source
of
energy
increased slightly.
Gas
, coal and
petro
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petrol
were the dominant
energy
source
in 1995,
however
,
petro
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petrol
usage
had
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decreased in 2005. The percentage of
gas
and coal was 29,63 and 29,80 in 1995 with a minor increase of 0,68% and 1,13% in 2005 respectively.
This
source
makes a total of more than 60% of the total amount of
energy
source
production. The nuclear and other sources of
energy
increased by around double from 6,4% to 10,10% and 4,9% to 9,10% respectively in the given period.
On the other hand
,
petro
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had a significant decrease of just around 10% in 2005 which
leave
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it to a total of 19,55%.
Thus
,
petro
is only a fifth of the total proportion of
energy
sources in 2005.
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