The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress level amongs professionals in eight groups. Describe the information shown to a university or coollage lecurer.
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The chart makes a comparison between working
hours
and the stress
level in eight different groups. The data shows that lectures
who Correct your spelling
lecturers
work
the least number of hours
suffer the most form
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from
stress related
illnesses.
Lectures with Add a hyphen
stress-related
the
average of 25 worked Correct article usage
an
hours
per week and chefs with 30,
are Remove the comma
apply
two
groups that spend the least time Correct article usage
the two
in
Change preposition
at
the
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apply
work
. Subsequently
, a similar level of hours
have
been presented in the case of lawyers, writers, and programmers, 35, 40, and 50, respectively. Change the verb form
has
In addition
, while
doctors spend 50 hours
weekly in the work
, movie producers 10 more than that – 60. People who have been devoting the most time to work
are business men
with the number of 70 Correct your spelling
businessmen
hours
.
Comparing it to the possibility of suffering from stress related
illnesses, only 5% of programmers are in danger of Add a hyphen
stress-related
such
problems. Then
, 8% is shared by writers and lawyers, while
10% by movie producers and chefs. Further
, there is 11% of people having
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have
stress related
illnesses among Add a hyphen
stress-related
business men
Correct your spelling
businessmen
,
and 15% among doctors. Remove the comma
apply
One-fours
of all incidents take place among lectures.Correct your spelling
One-fourth
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, stress, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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