The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress level amongs professionals in eight groups. Describe the information shown to a university or coollage lecurer.

The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress level amongs professionals in eight groups. Describe the information shown to a university or coollage lecurer.
The chart makes a comparison between working
hours
and the
stress
level in eight different groups. The data shows that
lectures
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lecturers
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who
work
the least number of
hours
suffer the most
form
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from
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stress related
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illnesses. Lectures with
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average of 25 worked
hours
per week and chefs with 30
,
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are
two
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the two
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groups that spend the least time
in
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the
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work
.
Subsequently
, a similar level of
hours
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been presented in the case of lawyers, writers, and programmers, 35, 40, and 50, respectively.
In addition
,
while
doctors spend 50
hours
weekly in the
work
, movie producers 10 more than that – 60. People who have been devoting the most time to
work
are
business men
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with the number of 70
hours
. Comparing it to the possibility of suffering from
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illnesses, only 5% of programmers are in danger of
such
problems.
Then
, 8% is shared by writers and lawyers,
while
10% by movie producers and chefs.
Further
, there is 11% of people
having
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stress related
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illnesses among
business men
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businessmen
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,
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and 15% among doctors.
One-fours
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One-fourth
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of all incidents take place among lectures.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, stress, work with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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