The table below shows the percentage of members of parliament who were women in five regions, compared to the percentage of worldwide, in 1990, 1997 and 2005.

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The line chart illustrates the proportion of female members of government in Germany,Italy,France, the

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and

Belgium

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in twelve years starting from 2000. All the numbers increased every year

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, the highest number increased in the

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. Analyse the chart Germany and France were growing slowly but still,they are in the top three with the highest of nearly 37% and 32%. Italy grew a bit fast after 2008 and jumped to a peak in the chart

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of the year 2012.Only in

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all the other

countries

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increased

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increased

and the

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jumped too fast

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,the

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started with 3% and

Belgium

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started with 17%. In 2008 the

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grew rapidly in number and reached near

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,both ended with the same number of 23%

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of the year 2012.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

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Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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