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You are organising a seminar for your company. Write a letter to the manager of another department inviting them to give a presentation at the seminar. In your letter: ◦ give details of the seminar ◦ invite them to give a presentation and say why you are inviting them ◦ say what the presentation should be about

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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to offer your department which calls marketing I and my employees of our
company
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 decided to hold a
seminar
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 on Sunday but many people wanted to rest that day
therefore
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 I will
held
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hold
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 a
seminar
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 on Monday because it is the first working day Our
company
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 has working for 2014 year so
that
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apply
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I will have a party after the
seminar
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. Many companies say that you are well-running your
company
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 and your employees are
working-well
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working well
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 so that extra money is distributed as a favor. Many offers are coming to our
company
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that
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which
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 is good because many want to use our products so
that
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apply
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we need to produce additional products for our clients and
this
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 requires extra staff if you are agree we will accept workers and we need extra space
therefore
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 I going to rent a
company
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 which is located in a countryside. If you have
another offers
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another offer
other offers
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 I will listen
in
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to
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this
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seminar
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 And
at the end
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 of the
seminar
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 you have to sign that you agree to
this
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 agreement and we will get to work quickly. Never put off the
seminar
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that is
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 so important for our
company
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 I look forward to hearing from you soon

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coherence cohesion
Ensure your letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. This helps in maintaining a logical structure.
coherence cohesion
Separate different ideas into distinct paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea.
task achievement
Address your invitation more clearly and explicitly state the purpose of the seminar. Explain why you think their department would be suitable for the presentation.
task achievement
Use a formal and polite tone throughout your letter. This adds professionalism and appropriateness to your invitation.
task achievement
You have included some relevant details about the seminar and your intentions.
coherence cohesion
There’s an appropriate attempt to conclude your letter by expressing your anticipation.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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