You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows the percentage of journeys made by different forms of transport in four countries, The bar graph shows the results of a survey into car use in Canada. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The table shows the percentage of journeys made by different forms of transport in four countries, The bar graph shows the results of a survey into car use in Canada.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
Accordingly
, both two charts reflect the vehicle that
people
like to
travel
with. There are many
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about
people
's
choice
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choices
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on
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of
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transportation
that we can see.
According to
the
frist
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first
table, most
people
in Canada chose to
travel
by
a
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car
which comes to 90% of the investigation. What
come
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next is walking by about 5%;
while
3% of Canadians select the public
transporation
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transportation
in
travel
, 1% of Canadians selectively chose to
travel
with
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by
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bicycle or other vehicles.
For
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the Belgium
people
, 72%
select
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the
car
; 12% chose
the
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public
transportation
; 11% chose to walk and the remaining 3% chose other
transportation
.
Also
, In the table, 58%
Germanies
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travel
by
the
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car
, what
come
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next is 18%
in
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public
transportaion
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transportation
, 11%
in
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walking, 2%
in
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bycycle
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bicycle
and 1%
in
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other
transportation
. For the Netherland
people
, 47% of them chose to
travel
by
car
, 26% by
bycycle
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bicycle
, 18% by walking, 8% by public
transportation
and 1% in any other form.
Accoring
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According
to the second chart, there are many reasons for Canadian
people
to
travel
by
the
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car
. About 37% of them claim that there are no
alternative
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alternatives
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other than
car
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cars
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. 30% of investigators use
car
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cars
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due to
their need in work;
while
21% think cars are pretty convenient, 13% say cars are quicker than other
chocies
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choices
. And about 8%
travel
by
car
due to
nightshift work. The two different charts focus on
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same topic--
transportation
choice. And
their
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are
large
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amount of
people
, even from
different
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country
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countries
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, mainly
chose
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choose
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to
travel
by
the
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car
. And many Canadian
people
have no alternative choice when it comes to
transportation
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to, while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, travel, transportation, car with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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