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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows the percentage of journeys made by different forms of transport in four countries, The bar graph shows the results of a survey into car use in Canada. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows the percentage of journeys made by different forms of transport in four countries, The bar graph shows the results of a survey into car use in Canada. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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Accordingly
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, both two charts reflect the vehicle that
people
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 like to
travel
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 with. There are many
information
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of information
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 about
people
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's
choice
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choices
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on
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of
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transportation
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 that we can see.
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 the
frist
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first
 table, most
people
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 in Canada chose to
travel
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 by
a
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car
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 which comes to 90% of the investigation. What
come
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 next is walking by about 5%;
while
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 3% of Canadians select the public
transporation
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transportation
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travel
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, 1% of Canadians selectively chose to
travel
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with
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by
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 bicycle or other vehicles.
For
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Of
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 the Belgium
people
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, 72%
select
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 the
car
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; 12% chose
the
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public
transportation
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; 11% chose to walk and the remaining 3% chose other
transportation
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.
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, In the table, 58%
Germanies
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of Germanies
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travel
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 by
the
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car
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, what
come
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comes
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 next is 18%
in
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by
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 public
transportaion
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transportation
, 11%
in
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by
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 walking, 2%
in
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by
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bycycle
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bicycle
 and 1%
in
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by
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 other
transportation
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. For the Netherland
people
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, 47% of them chose to
travel
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 by
car
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, 26% by
bycycle
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bicycle
, 18% by walking, 8% by public
transportation
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 and 1% in any other form.
Accoring
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According
 to the second chart, there are many reasons for Canadian
people
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 to
travel
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 by
the
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car
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. About 37% of them claim that there are no
alternative
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alternatives
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 other than
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car
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cars
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. 30% of investigators use
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car
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cars
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due to
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 their need in work;
while
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 21% think cars are pretty convenient, 13% say cars are quicker than other
chocies
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choices
. And about 8%
travel
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 by
car
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due to
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 nightshift work. The two different charts focus on
one
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the
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 same topic--
transportation
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 choice. And
their
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there
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 are
large
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a large
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 amount of
people
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, even from
different
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a different
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country
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countries
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, mainly
chose
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choose
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 to
travel
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 by
the
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apply
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car
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. And many Canadian
people
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 have no alternative choice when it comes to
transportation
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to, while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, travel, transportation, car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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