IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 3.5

You bought a piece of furniture from a store in another town recently.This is a problem with the item you bought

#piece #furniture #store #town #item
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Dear Sir or Madam I am writing a complaint about your
furniture
.
Last
 week I went to Samarkand because my children needed a bed. I live in the city of Navoi. I built a new kitchen
last
 month, so I needed a lot of
furniture
. I saw your shop on Instagram one day. Your
store
 had comfortable
furniture
.
Also
, your
store
 is much cheaper than other stores.
Then
 I went to your
store
. I was very surprised when I saw it for sale on life. Your
store
 has good points.
For example
. modern and new
furniture
, location in the city
center
Change the spelling
centre
show examples
 and affordability. I brought modern bedding.
However
, when I got home, I saw broken beds. I think the best way to solve the problem is to replace it with a better one. I hope you will resolve the matter to our satisfaction. Yours faithfully, Lily Smith
Submitted by omondavlat91 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task achievement
The essay should provide more specific details about the problem with the beds to make the complaint clearer. You could include information on how the beds are broken and what damage you have observed.
coherence cohesion
Consider working on linking words and phrases to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs. This will enhance the coherence and cohesion of your essay.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes both an introduction and a conclusion, which provides a clear structure for your writing.
task achievement
The request for a resolution at the end of the letter demonstrates a clear way of addressing the issue and asking for a specific action.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: