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The pie charts below show the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets. Summarize the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets. Summarize the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts compare the share of 3
carbohydrates
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, fat and
protein
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 in three types of
diet
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. All in all,
carbohydrates
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 have the highest percentage
on
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 healthy
diet
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 types and fat has the lowest percentage among all categories. Foods in
healthy
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a healthy
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diet
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 for sport
are mostly consist
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 of
carbohydrates
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 which
takes
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 60% of the share. Followed by
protein
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, occupying a quarter of the whole proportion. And fat comes
last
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 with only 15%.
Carbohydrates
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takes
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 half
proportion
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a proportion
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 of
healthy
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a healthy
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diet
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. There is 5% more
of
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protein
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 and fat in
healthy
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a healthy
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diet
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, compared to
healthy
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a healthy
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diet
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 with the aim for sport, with 30% and 20% respectively.
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 with the 2 categories, an average
diet
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 consists of the same exact share of
carbohydrates
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 and
protein
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 which is 40%. The percentage
for
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 fat is the same with
healthy
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a healthy
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diet
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 which is only 20%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words carbohydrates, protein, diet with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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