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The table presents information about university-level academic staff in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table presents information about university-level academic staff in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the changes
number
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 of university academic staff by nine subjects in 2005 and 2013. Obviously, there
was
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were
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a
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apply
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positive trends in almost all
subjects area
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subject areas
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experienced
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experiencing
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increase
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an increase
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 in
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number
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a number
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 of academic staff, but there
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also
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was also
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some
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a
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 reduced
number
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 of staff in
two
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the two
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subject
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 areas. Architecture is the biggest
subject
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, changed positively
more
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by more
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 than 30% in
eight
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an
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years
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eight-year
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 period,
while
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 the Arts, Business and Medicine increased
more
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by more
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 than 20%.
For
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apply
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Science and Humanities have growth in
slightly
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the slightly
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 same range at 10-15%, and have the same
comparation
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comparison
 teacher per student,
that is
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 1:11.
Although
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 Agriculture and Education experienced a decline
number
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 of academic
staffs
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staff
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,
but
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apply
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the
comparation
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comparison
 of
teacher
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teachers
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 per student
are
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is
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 slightly the same with
Engineering
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the Engineering
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subject
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, the lowest additional member among
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the others
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others
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other subjects
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subject
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, subject with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender distribution
  • academic staff
  • faculties
  • ratios
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • dominance
  • balance
  • disparities
  • hiring practices
  • overview
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