This Graphs below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.
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Writing Text 1
The graph below gives information on the
numbers
of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
There is data about the Fix the agreement mistake
number
amount
of Change the quantifier
number
people
who took part in several activities at a social center
located in Melbourne, Australia between the years 2000 and 2020. These activities include Change the spelling
centre
film
club
, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances.
In the year
2000s film
club
became very popular and Fix the agreement mistake
clubs
has
the most participants. The Wrong verb form
had
film
club
reached more than 60 people
. Over the years, film
clubs have stayed strong because they maintained
their Verb problem
keep
members
from not leaving. Next,
there is martial arts which is a self defense
activity. It started with having more than 30 Add a hyphen
self-defense
members
yet having less than 40 people
. Then
the year
2005 came and it lost a few members
but regained its candidates in the year
2020.
With amateur dramatics, it had around 25 people
in the 2000s however
there were drastic changes to this
activity when they lost their attendees. In the year
2020, martial arts had around 10 people
that are still active. The following activity is table tennis, starting off in the year
2000 table tennis had approximately 16 people
however
they had an unexpected increase of
attendees Change preposition
in
throughout
time. In 2020, they had over more than 50 Change preposition
over
members
.
Last
but not least, there are musical performances with a tragic story because they literally have no subscribers at all. Nevertheless
, they managed to gain a few new humans to join this
function. By 2010, they had 10 new humans. And in the year
2020, they managed to grow their group by having roughly 25 contributors. In the end, the film
club
is still the winner by
having the highest Change preposition
of
contributors
.Correct quantifier usage
number of contributors
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