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The given line graph illustrates the figure for carbon dioxide emitted by each person in four countries in Europe over a span of 40 years, from 1967 to 2007.

The given line graph illustrates the figure for carbon dioxide emitted by each person in four countries in Europe over a span of 40 years, from 1967 to 2007.
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The line chart illustrates the amount of CO2 that people in four nations produced for four decades.
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, people in the United Kingdom and Sweden tended to emit less CO2
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 the amount of CO2 produced in Italy and Portugal increased. The United Kingdom continued to be the largest producer of CO2 with Portugal being the least throughout the whole examined periods. Starting with the countries whose emission of CO2 tended to rise, Italy showed a
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 rise from just above 4 metric
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 in 1967 to over 6 metric
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 in 1977. The increase continued more mildly until 1997 with below 8 metric
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, from which it remained stable by 2007. Portugal
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 experienced a constant rise from 1967 to 2007 with about 1 metric tonne and above 5 metric
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, respectively
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 it never exceeded Italy. Turning to the countries with fewer
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 of CO2, the United Kingdom showed a gradual decrease from about 11 metric
tonnes
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 in 1967 to around 9 metric
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 in 2007. There was a more dramatic decline in Sweden from just over 10 metric
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 to above
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5 metric
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 in 2007 in spite of a sharp increase from over 8 metric
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 in 1967 to above 10 metric
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 in 1977.
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