The chart shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men amd women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men amd women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph below
illustrate
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the
compasernce
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comparison
of education
qualification
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qualifications
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in Austria and
proportion
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the proportion
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of
female
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females
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and
male
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males
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who
viseted
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visited
school
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the school
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during
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1999. The gives information about four
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such
as
:
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Master
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Master's
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Degree
, Postgraduate
Diploma
, Bachelor's
Degree
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Degree
,
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and Skilled
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Vocationalk
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Vocational
Diploma
. The dramatical difference in
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Vocational
diploma
which
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is contain
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over four-fifth
for
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male
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males
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and only one in ten
for
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female
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females
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. The slightly same proportions in the Bachelor's
Degree
that maintain half of
man
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men
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and just under women. The unexpected provided information in Undergraduate
Diploma
, where
female
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females
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are in significant majority seven in them and
male
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males
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almost more than
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two-fifths
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. The Post Graduate Program and
Master
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Master's
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Degrees
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Degree
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slighty
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slightly
the same
nealry
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nearly
less than a third and two fifth for
female
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females
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and seven in ten
three-fifth
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three-fifths
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for
male
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males
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. The
last
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for women
is
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rose
for
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a half and for men
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for
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a
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more than two fifth. The proportions for
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chart
descrabes
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describe
where the
male
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males
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got a very large majority and women a significant proportions.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words degree, diploma with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • levels
  • post-school qualifications
  • proportion
  • men
  • women
  • held
  • clear gender disparity
  • Certificate I
  • Certificate II
  • Certificate III
  • Certificate IV
  • Diploma or Higher
  • highest proportion
  • decreases
  • overall
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