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The graphs below provide information on global population figures and figures for urban populations in different world regions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below provide information on global population figures and figures for urban populations in different world regions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph displays the world
population
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 growth from 1800 to 2100. The bar graph shows the projected change in numbers for the urban
population
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 in the developed and developing
areas
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 of the world between 2015 and 2040.
Overall
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, the
population
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 figures are projected to increase significantly on a global scale starting at 1800.
While
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 the developed regions are predicted to have constant numbers for their urban residents between 2015 and 2040, the developing ones would see an impactful rise. The number of humans inhabiting the planet increased steadily year on year starting at 1000
million
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 in 1800 to nearly 2500
million
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 in 1950.
This
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 is expected to rise dramatically in the next few years peaking at approximately 8000
million
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 in 2040.
However
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, in the next few
years
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years,
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 it would decline gradually to just over 6000
million
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 towards the end of the period. The non-rural
population
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 figures are expected to stay constant in the developed
areas
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, starting at around 1200
million
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 in 2015 and maintaining
this
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 by the end of 2040. Contrarily, the numbers for the same category in the developing
areas
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 grew consistently, starting at just over 2000
million
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 in 2015 to nearly 2400
million
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 in 2020,
while
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 staying significantly higher than the developed
areas
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 over the period. The same trend is projected to continue for the developing countries, peaking at around 4000
million
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 in 2040, nearly quadruple of their developing counterparts.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, areas, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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