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Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised fo someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter - suggest how you could help her in her home - say why you would like to do this work - explain when you will and will not be available

#mrs #barrett #woman #lives #town #fo #someone #home #hours #summer #work
Dear Mrs Barrett, I have read
your
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advertise
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 that you need to help with work in your home
a
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couple
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 hours a day next summer season. Your
advertise
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intersted
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interested
 me because I have
an
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available time next summer and I would like to help you. My
neighbor
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 helped me the
last
 year as well and I would like to do the same for someone else who needs my help. It will be my pleasure to help you. I can offer my skills what I have.
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, I have a lot of
experiences
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 with
the
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cleaning, cooking, care of children and the
last
with
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the maintenance garden.
The gardening
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 is my hobby. If you are interested
about
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 my skills and help. I am available from
2nd
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 and 4th week of July and
whole
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 of August. Please let me know via
emial
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email
 if you want to take
of
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 my offer. Kind regards Andrea Kroupa
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task achievement
To improve your response, be sure to clearly address each part of the prompt. It can help to organize your ideas more systematically. Start with expressing interest and providing your qualifications before moving on to your availability.
coherence cohesion
Enhance paragraph transitions for better flow between ideas. Making sure each paragraph connects logically will help in achieving higher coherence.
task achievement
You have addressed all parts of the task, including suggesting how you can help, explaining your motivations, and providing available times.
coherence cohesion
Your letter has a clear greeting and closing, maintaining a polite and helpful tone throughout.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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