The table below shows employment patterns for males and females in New Zealand in 1993 and 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows employment patterns for males and females in New Zealand in

 1993 and 2003.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
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The supplied table indicates employment
various
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parts for men and women in New
Zealand
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over a ten-year period. A glance at the graph reveals that the highest
percentage
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of employment patterns is for difficulties in finding skilled
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in New
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.
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, employees who were technical and managerial did not have many problems
to find
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a job over the period. In 2004, the
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of issues for finding skilled
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for manufacturing was just over
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half (51%), (which was the highest number of problems over the whole year) just ahead of building and services at 45% in New
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in 2004.
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, roughly a third of difficulties in finding unskilled
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was for manufacturing (28%), compared to 2003 which accounted for 26% in New
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.
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, the
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of difficulties in finding technical and managerial
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for commerce in New
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in 2004 was a bit as few as
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at 0% and 2%, respectively. (Which were the lowest
percentage
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of problems over the whole year).
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