The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph shows the amount of one
country
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country's
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exports in different
products
during 2015 and 2016. It is clear from the graph that the value of petroleum
prouducts
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products
continuously dominated in both years compared with other
products
.
While
the equivalent figure for trextails
catogaries
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categories
ranked the lowest during the period shown. The petroleum
products
was 60
billions
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billion
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in 2015 which increased a little by 65
billions
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billion
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in 2016 .
However
, the engineered materials
was
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were
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below 60
billions
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billion
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approximately which nearly jumped to 62
billions
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billion
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in 2016.
On the other hand
, the export amount of jewellery
products
rose to above 40
billions
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billion
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in 2015 and decreased to 40
billions
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billion
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in 2016 .
Also
the number of agricultural
products
export
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exported
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had the same value
in
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apply
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throughout the period time . The export of
textile
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textiles
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declined
less
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to less
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than 30
billions
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billion
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in 2015
then
grew to 35
billions
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billion
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in the following year .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words products, billions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • categories
  • value
  • increase
  • decrease
  • comparison
  • significant
  • figures
  • percentage
  • notable
  • trend
  • overall
  • specific
  • observed
  • presented
  • individually
  • highlight
  • general
  • data
  • summarize
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