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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph shows the amount of one
country
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country's
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 exports in different
products
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 during 2015 and 2016. It is clear from the graph that the value of petroleum
prouducts
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products
 continuously dominated in both years compared with other
products
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 .
While
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 the equivalent figure for trextails
catogaries
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categories
 ranked the lowest during the period shown. The petroleum
products
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 was 60
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billions
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billion
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 in 2015 which increased a little by 65
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billions
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billion
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 in 2016 .
However
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 , the engineered materials
was
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were
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 below 60
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billions
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billion
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 approximately which nearly jumped to 62
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billions
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billion
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 in 2016.
On the other hand
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 , the export amount of jewellery
products
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 rose to above 40
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billions
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billion
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 in 2015 and decreased to 40
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billions
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billion
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 in 2016 .
Also
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 the number of agricultural
products
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export
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exported
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had the same value
in
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apply
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throughout the period time . The export of
textile
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textiles
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 declined
less
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to less
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 than 30
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billions
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billion
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 in 2015
then
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 grew to 35
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billions
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billion
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 in the following year .

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words products, billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • categories
  • value
  • increase
  • decrease
  • comparison
  • significant
  • figures
  • percentage
  • notable
  • trend
  • overall
  • specific
  • observed
  • presented
  • individually
  • highlight
  • general
  • data
  • summarize
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