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The line graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates how many attendances engaged in 5 different
activities
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, including film club, material arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances, at one particular social centre in Melbourne, Australia for a 2-decade
period
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 from 2000 to 2020.
Overall
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, the participation trends of these
activities
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 varied considerably. The film club consistently attracted the highest number of
participants
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,
while
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 amateur dramatics saw a significant decline. Material art experienced a fluctuating trend, and table tennis and musical performances increased during the
period
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. In 2000, the film club had about 65
participants
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, the most among all
activities
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,
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this
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and this
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 figure almost remained constant over the 20 years. Material arts followed with approximately 30 in 2020, fluctuating between 30 and 40 by 2020, and reached about its initial number in 2020. Amateur dramatics
initially
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 had around 15
participants
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, which consistently decreased after a slight rise in 2005, and ultimately reached the lowest number of
participants
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 among all
activities
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 to about 5 by 2020. The tennis table,
on the other hand
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, saw a gradual increase till the half of the
period
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.
This
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 figure
then
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 surged to around 55, having the biggest growth in comparison with others. Musical performances had the fewest
participants
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, fewer than 5 at the beginning of the
period
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.
However
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, interest in
this
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 activity grew considerably, especially after 2005, peaking at about 15
participants
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 fifteen years later in 2020.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words activities, period, participants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerably" was used 2 times.
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