The line graph below gives information on cinema attendance in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The current diagram shows data on
cinema
attendance
in the United Kingdom.
Overall
,people with
Change preposition
in
age
Correct article usage
the age
group
between 14-24 was visiting
Wrong verb form
visited
cinema
often in 2010,but there was a Correct article usage
the cinema
little
increase Correct word choice
small
up
to 20% in 2010.Another Change preposition
of up
age
group
24-34 started with more that
20% Correct word choice
than
percent
in Change the spelling
per cent
attendance
in 1990 and went up to almost 35% percent
.Change the spelling
per cent
Other
Change the wording
Another
age
group
between 34-44 was going to the cinema
quite a lot at the beginning,but in 2000 attendance
decreased down
to 30%.Change preposition
apply
However
in
2010 was the most visited year.The Change preposition
apply
last
group
on the graph with the age
group
between 44-54.In 1995 the
Correct article usage
apply
attendance
was stable Change preposition
at aroud
aroud
40% Correct your spelling
around
percents
,Fix the agreement mistake
percent
furthermore
in 2000 it's even
decreased dramatically down to 30% Verb problem
it
percent
.Besides
a decrease in 2000,the overall
people
that visited Correct quantifier usage
number of people
cinema
Correct article usage
the cinema
from
2000 and 2010 increased Change preposition
between
more
Change preposition
by more
that
50% Correct word choice
than
percent
and Change the spelling
per cent
it's
reached Unnecessary verb
it
highest
Correct article usage
the highest
attendance
.
To summarize,people with
Change preposition
from
the
different Correct article usage
apply
age
group
visit the Fix the agreement mistake
groups
cinema
but every time it may vary.Submitted by ayhanhuseynov13 on
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cinema, attendance, age, group, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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