Task 1 The line graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1

The line graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line graph illustrates how many people participated in 6 different activities at one particular social centre in Melbourne, Australia in a timeframe between 2000 and 2020.
Overall
, across the 2-decade
period
,
although
the
number
of amateur dramatics participants declined, that of the other 5 activities either increased or saw a fluctuation trend.
Besides
, the amount of film club members kept its position at the top of the list and table tennis membership experienced the biggest growth during the
period
. Regarding film club participants, the
number
of its attendance stayed almost constant by about 65 without considering a slight decrease in the middle of the given
period
.
Similarly
, the
number
of material art participants
maintained
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the same
of
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as
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its initial amount by roughly 35 individuals following a fluctuation trend from 2000 to 2020. The
number
of table tennis members slightly increased, reaching about 20 in 2010,
then
surged to approximately 55
at the end
of the phase.
In addition
, musical
performances attendances
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rose from 0 in 2005 to about 15 in 2020.
In contrast
, despite a rise to just under 30 in 2005, the
number
of amateur dramatics members dramatically decreased by
near
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nearly
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25
at the end
of the
period
.
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