The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)

The two

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charts demonstrate the online shopping sales for retail

sectors

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in Canada between 2005 and 2010.

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the

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charts, the

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percentage

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percentages

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of each retail

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sectors

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sector

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are pretty close to each other

especially

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in 2005.

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chart shows the highest

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of retail

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in 2005, which is electronics & appliances that have 35

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percent

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and the lowest

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of retail

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in 2005, which is video games

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has

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18

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percent

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. As

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to the graph, the

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percentage

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percentages

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of the highest and the lowest

have

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are

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only 17

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percent

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apart, which can be

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clearly

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seen that the

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percentage

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percentages

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of each retail

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sectors

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sector

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are pretty close to each other and

doesn’t

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don’t

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make much of a difference.

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the

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charts, in 2005 the

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of 30

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percent

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of electronics & appliances is the highest

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of retail

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among the other but suddenly has a 5

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percent

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drop in 2010.

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result

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the

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of electronics & appliances

to be

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second to the highest in 2010 and leading the way to the highest is now food & beverage with 32

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percent

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.

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, the

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of home furnishing in 2005

that has

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25

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, which results

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second to the highest in 2005.

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, in 2010 the

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of home furnishing

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decreased a lot and resulted

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in

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the lowest

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in 2010 with

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drop and resulted with only 15

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in 2010.

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can be seen that the needs of these retail

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are lower compared to the

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in 2005.

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, the

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of each retail

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sectors

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sector

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in 2005

has

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decreased in 2010 except for the

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of video games and food & beverage, which

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increased from 22

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percent

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in 2005 to 32

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percent

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and resulted to be the highest in 2010 followed by video games that has increased from 18

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percent

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to 23

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percent

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in 2010.

This

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can be seen that the needs of these retail

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are higher compared to the

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in 2005.