The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the earned money of one country's
export
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exports
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in five different categories from 2015 to 2016. The table represents the
porportion
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proportion
if
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of
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value change between 2015 to 2016.
Overall
, the highest
changed
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and earned export was
textiles
but
about
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gems
and
jewelry
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dropped slightly
while
,
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engineered goods increased gradually.
However
, in table displays the value of
textiles
dramatically increased .
In contrast
,
gems
and
jewelry
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jewellery
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values decreased. In terms of time ,
textiles
earned money increased by 7
billion
dollars in 2016 but
on the contrary
gems
and
jewelry
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jewellery
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collected money went down
in
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43
billion
to 41
billion
dollars. The first two petroleum
products
and engineered goods were increased by approximately 1
billion
and 3
billion
respectively.
However
, agricultural
products
was remained
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remained
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relatively unchanged
in
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at
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32
billion
dollars
in
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2015 to 2016.
On the other hand
, the percentage of
textiles
value went up dramatically
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percent and
second
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highest changed product was engineered goods increased
8.5
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%. Petroleum
products
stock increased by 3%
whereas
, agricultural
products
rosen
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rose
slightly
0.81
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by 0.81
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percent
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per cent
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in 2016.
In contrast
,
gems
and
jewelry
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jewellery
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price
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prices
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was
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declined suddenly
5.18
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percent
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per cent
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in the year 2016.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, in contrast".
Vocabulary: Replace the words textiles, gems, jewelry, billion, products with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • economic sector
  • percentage change
  • increment
  • decrement
  • fluctuation
  • trend analysis
  • year-on-year comparison
  • significant growth/decline
  • stagnation
  • market dynamics
  • fiscal repercussions
  • trade balance
  • competitive advantage
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