The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and  reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compares the percentage of
Canadian
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the Canadian
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workforce
in five fields
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1850 and 2020. All in all, services was the industry with the highest amount of
workforce
in 2020
whereas
manufacturing was the highest in 1850. The
workforce
for energy/water was notably the lowest in both years. In 1850, manufacturing and services were the areas with the most
workforce
, with
manufaturing
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manufacturing
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first,
accounting for 36% and 33% respectively. The number of
workforce
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in agriculture/fishing followed next with just above 20%. The Canadian
workforce
in construction and energy/water
were
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the lowest with 5% and 3% respectively. In 2020,
services
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the services
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industry had the
most
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largest
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share of
workforce
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the workforce
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allocated at 81%,
highest
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the highest
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in all fields over the period given.
In contrast
, there were only below 10% of
workforce
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the workforce
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in both manufacturing and construction.
Similarly
, industries working in agriculture and energy shared the same exact percentage of
workforce
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the workforce
a workforce
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which was only 1%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words workforce with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • workforce composition
  • significant shift
  • increase/decrease in percentage
  • service industries
  • manufacturing
  • construction
  • noteworthy trends
  • tech industry
  • economic evolution
  • technological evolution
  • main features
  • comparisons
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