The graph below shows the average consumption of cheese per person in England, Scotland,Wales and Northern Ireland between 1980 and 2020.
The graph illustrates the
amount
of cheese on average consumption
on
British (England, Change preposition
by
Scotland
, Wales
and Northem
Ireland ) between 1980 and 2020.
Correct your spelling
North
Overall
, England accounted for the most consumption
at the beginning and the end of the years between 1980 and 2020 and saw an overall
decrease. Consumption
in Scotland
also
shows a decline from 1980 to 2020 whereas
Wales
and Northern both increased.
Cheese consumption
in England began at about 110 kilograms in 1980 and declined steadily throughout the
time shown to the end at nearly 85 KG. Meanwhile, the Correct article usage
apply
amount
of that in Scotland
saw an initial rise from 1980 to 1990. However
, from that point to the end of the period, it dropped to finish the period at less than 60 KG in 2020 and became the least amount
among
the UK.
Change preposition
in
Although
the amount
of cheese consumption
in Wales
and Northern Ireland were
the lowest Change the verb form
was
while
Correct word choice
apply
Wales
had about 20KG
more than Northern Ireland, at nearly 15 kilograms. Both of them increased steadily over the whole period from 1980 to 2020, and Correct your spelling
20 kg
they
their Correct pronoun usage
apply
amount
exceed
that of Wrong verb form
exceeded
Scotland
successively in 2002 and 2018.Submitted by fiasngs on
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