The graph below shows the average consumption of cheese per person in England, Scotland,Wales and Northern Ireland between 1980 and 2020.

The graph below shows the average consumption of cheese per person in England, Scotland,Wales and Northern Ireland between 1980 and 2020.
The graph illustrates the
amount
of cheese on average
consumption
on
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British (England,
Scotland
,
Wales
and
Northem
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North
Ireland ) between 1980 and 2020.
Overall
, England accounted for the most
consumption
at the beginning and the end of the years between 1980 and 2020 and saw an
overall
decrease.
Consumption
in
Scotland
also
shows a decline from 1980 to 2020
whereas
Wales
and Northern both increased. Cheese
consumption
in England began at about 110 kilograms in 1980 and declined steadily throughout
the
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time shown to the end at nearly 85 KG. Meanwhile, the
amount
of that in
Scotland
saw an initial rise from 1980 to 1990.
However
, from that point to the end of the period, it dropped to finish the period at less than 60 KG in 2020 and became the least
amount
among
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the UK.
Although
the
amount
of cheese
consumption
in
Wales
and Northern Ireland
were
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the lowest
while
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Wales
had about
20KG
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20 kg
more than Northern Ireland, at nearly 15 kilograms. Both of them increased steadily over the whole period from 1980 to 2020, and
they
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their
amount
exceed
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that of
Scotland
successively in 2002 and 2018.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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