The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and  reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart depicts the proportion of Canadian work
labors
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in five different sectors between 1850 and 2020.
Overall
, it is evident that the percentage of employees in services and construction fields showed an upward shift,
whereas
the remaining sectors, manufacturing, agriculture/fishing, and energy/water, experienced a downward trend during the years. In 1850, manufacturing workers contributed to 36% of
total
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the total
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workforces
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workforce
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, making it the dominant sector among others. It
then
plummeted to only 9% by 2020.
Following
this
, in 1850,
service
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the service
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field had a similar amount of workers, amounting
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33%, before surging to 81% by 2020.
On the other hand
, the percentage of
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the workforces
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workforces
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workforce
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in the agriculture/fishing sector was 22% in 1850 and it dramatically fell to only 1% by 2020. The employees in
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construction contributed to 5%, before slightly rising to 8% by 2020.
Energy
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The energy
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/water sector showed the
least
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lowest
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rate of workers which was only 3% in 1850 and
this
figure decreased to the bottom position with only 1%, similar to the agriculture/fishing field.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • workforce composition
  • significant shift
  • increase/decrease in percentage
  • service industries
  • manufacturing
  • construction
  • noteworthy trends
  • tech industry
  • economic evolution
  • technological evolution
  • main features
  • comparisons
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