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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What are the factors that contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

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Since adults spend the majority of their time at
work
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 in order to maintain their living, it is believed that whether employees are satisfied with their
jobs
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 is particularly important in considering
ones’
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 individual
wellbeing
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. The primary causes that impact the masses'
job
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satisfaction
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 are the salary and the maintenance of
work
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-life balance. First and foremost, personal
job
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satisfaction
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 is always driven by the salary they can get
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 the personal time they can maintain in their daily lives.
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, if we can get a reasonable salary, we must be more willing to keep working. Vice
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, if the money we get can’t reflect the efforts we pay at
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,
in other words
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, what we gain doesn’t equal
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what we pay, we will very likely dislike our
jobs
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 or even hate them.
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,
work
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-life balance is
also
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 a crucial component of one’s wellbeing. As a human, despite the fact that it is undeniable that working is essential to earn our lives, rest is
also
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 indispensable. A good rest will lay the groundwork
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 a good day. Regarding the interviews of some teachers, it is found that being a teacher, there are always follow-throughs after
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.
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, they usually maintain
a
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low
job
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satisfaction
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.
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, their personal
wellbeing
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 is being affected negatively.
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, when talking about the realist of workers’ expectation of
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satisfaction
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, it seems that it is
in
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 a low level. It is difficult to
fulfill
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 all people’s
satisfaction
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 in
jobs
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 as everyone has
an
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own ruler when considering whether they enjoy the
work
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 or not. Some may like their
job
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 because of the aforementioned
work
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-life balance lifestyles ,
while
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 some may satisfied with their
works
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due to
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 the admission of effort pay they can gain through working.
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, there may be controversies among the employees and employers. Owing to the above reasons, it is not realistic that all the workers can gain their expected
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satisfaction
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 through the
jobs
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.
To sum up
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,
although
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job
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satisfaction
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 is a vital part of one’s own
wellbeing
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 undoubtedly, there are several lenses impacting
the
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job
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satisfaction
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, and it may come out that it is merely a delusion that the expectation of
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satisfaction
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 for all workers can be fulfilled
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task achievement
Ensure you support your main points with more specific and varied examples. While some examples are given, more variety and depth could strengthen the argument.
task achievement
Try to minimize minor language errors, such as 'ones’' instead of 'one’s', or 'vice verse' instead of 'vice versa', which can impact clarity.
coherence cohesion
Work on slightly improving the logical flow of ideas, particularly in the third paragraph where points about the realism of job satisfaction expectations could be better integrated.
task achievement
The essay clearly outlines two major points contributing to job satisfaction: salary and work-life balance, providing a solid framework for discussion.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion clearly present and wrap up the main topic and arguments, providing a strong sense of closure.
coherence cohesion
Paragraphs are structured effectively with clear topic sentences, contributing to an organized presentation of ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • job satisfaction
  • wellbeing
  • contribute
  • meaningful work
  • work-life balance
  • career progression
  • workplace environment
  • recognition
  • constructive feedback
  • compensation
  • benefits
  • job security
  • autonomy
  • skills match
  • interests match
  • variety
  • challenge
  • economic conditions
  • labor market
  • individual expectations
  • job role
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