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Task 1: The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1: The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the
rate
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 of joblessness in three countries
uk
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, japan and the rest of
Europe
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 between 1993 and 2007. In 1993, the
unemployment
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rate
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 in the
Europe
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 and
uk
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 was about 9% and 11% respectively.The
rate
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 in
Europe
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 surged gradually until 1997,
then
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 decreased to almost 8% in 2007.In the meantime, the percentage of
unemployment
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 rates in the
UK
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 sharply declined to 5% in 2001
then
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 remained steady until 2005
then
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 rose slowly to 2007. Both
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uk
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UK
 and
Europe
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 depicted
the
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 descending shift. In 1993, the
unemployment
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rate
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 in Japan grew slightly till 1995, it was unchangeable,
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, it dramatically increased to 6% in 2003.
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 it quickly went down to 4% in 2007.
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,
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uk
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UK
unemployment
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rate
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 was the lowest
at the end
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 of the period .
Overall
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, The
unemployment
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rate
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 in Japan showed an upward trend whilst the percentage of unemployed rates in
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UK
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the UK
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 and
Europe
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 experienced a downward trend.
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