You have recently moved to a new neighbourhood and would like to join a sports centre there. You have found a private sports club. Write a letter to the manager of the sports club. In your letter, •introduce yourself •say why are you interested in this sports club •ask some questions about the club e.g facilities, membership, costs etc.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
lettter
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letter
to show my interest
to join
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in joining
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the private
sport
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sports
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club . My name is Sim and recently I
had
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moved from
dundas
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Dundas
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street to
mavis road
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Mavis Road
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. I find
difficult
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it difficult
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to travel
my
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old
sports
centre because now it is very far from my house. I searched
sports
club on
google
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last
week near
by
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my home and I found that your
sports
cub is only 3 km from my street. I am strongly interested in every
time
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type
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of
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sport
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sports
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sport
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so, I want to ask
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apply
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that
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which type of
sports
are included in the club.
As well as
,
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also
want to ask about the types of memberships. I will join it only for weekends as I have
full-time
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job so for Monday to Friday it is difficult to come on
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days.
I
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will
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be a great help if
i
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would know the cost of all memberships with the facilities. Hope I will get the response soon. Looking forward to
hear
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hearing your
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response. Yours faithfully Sim
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coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical sequence of your ideas and connect your sentences better for a clearer structure.
task achievement
Include more specific details or questions about the club to showcase a comprehensive approach to the task.
task achievement
Focus on choosing more formal phrases or expressions to enhance the professional tone of the letter.
coherence cohesion
You have used a clear greeting and closing, which fits well within the context of a formal letter.
coherence cohesion
Dividing your letter into paragraphs shows a strong organization, helping to address different points clearly.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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