You have recently moved to a new neighbourhood and would like to join a sports centre there. You have found a private sports club. Write a letter to the manager of the sports club. In your letter, •introduce yourself •say why are you interested in this sports club •ask some questions about the club e.g facilities, membership, costs etc.
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Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing
this
lettter
to show my interest Correct your spelling
letter
to join
the private Change preposition
in joining
sport
club .
My name is Sim and recently I Change the noun form
sports
had
moved from Unnecessary verb
apply
dundas
street to Change the capitalization
Dundas
mavis road
. I find Correct your spelling
Mavis Road
difficult
to travel Correct pronoun usage
it difficult
my
old Change preposition
to my
sports
centre because now it is very far from my house. I searched sports
club on google
Capitalize word
Google
last
week near by
my home and I found that your Change preposition
apply
sports
cub is only 3 km from my street. I am strongly interested in every time
of Correct your spelling
type
Fix the agreement mistake
sport
sports
so, I want to ask Fix the agreement mistake
sport
Correct pronoun usage
apply
that
which type of Correct pronoun usage
apply
sports
are included in the club. As well as
,
Remove the comma
apply
also
want to ask about the types of memberships. I will join it only for weekends as I have full-time
job so for Monday to Friday it is difficult to come on Add an article
a full-time
that
days. Correct determiner usage
those
I
Correct pronoun usage
It
will
be a great help if Wrong verb form
would
i
would know the cost of all memberships with the facilities. Hope I will get the response soon.
Looking forward to Change the capitalization
I
hear
response.
Yours faithfully
SimWrong verb form
hearing your
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coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical sequence of your ideas and connect your sentences better for a clearer structure.
task achievement
Include more specific details or questions about the club to showcase a comprehensive approach to the task.
task achievement
Focus on choosing more formal phrases or expressions to enhance the professional tone of the letter.
coherence cohesion
You have used a clear greeting and closing, which fits well within the context of a formal letter.
coherence cohesion
Dividing your letter into paragraphs shows a strong organization, helping to address different points clearly.
Structure your letter
A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:
- A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
- The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
- A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)
When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.
All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.