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The table presents how much people from five employment sectors earned, in three different salary levels in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table presents how much people from five employment sectors earned, in three different salary levels in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table gives data on the maximum, minimum and average
salaries
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 earned by people working in 5 different employment sectors, namely finance, transportation, construction, manufacturing
as well as
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 hospitality in 2009.
Overall
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, the lowest wages were observed in the hospitality
sector
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, except the minimum wage which the lower in the construction
sector
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,
while
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 the maximum was represented by the finance
sector
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 in all 3 levels. To start, the minimum, maximum and average
salaries
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 in the hospitality and and construction sectors were equal to 890, 2900,1895 and 790, 3100 and 1945
pounds
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 respectively. Obviously, these were the lowest positions.
Additionally
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,
although
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 the minimum wage was higher in the manufacturing
sector
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 rather than in the transportation
sector
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, being equal to 930
pounds
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, its maximum and average
salaries
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 which constituted 3500 and 2215
pounds
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 respectively, could not surpass the transportation where numbers made up 843
pounds
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 for minimum, 4580 for maximum and 2712
pounds
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 for average.
However
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,
in contrast
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 with other sectors, the finance
sector
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 had the highest position in all 3 levels of
salaries
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 in the United Kingdom, owing to its indicators comprising 1600
pounds
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 for the minimum wage, 5225
pounds
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 for the average and 8850
pounds
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 for the maximum.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salaries, sector, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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