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The diagram below shows the stages in the food production chain of the United States. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the stages in the food production chain of the United States. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagram illustrates the stages of
food
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production
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of
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in
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 the United States.
Overall
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,
the
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apply
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food
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production
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is going
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 through four stages to reach the table of
the
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restaurants and the houses of
the
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consumers.
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,
the
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food
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production
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start
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starts
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 from the stage "
Production
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". It consists of
cow
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a cow
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 gazing in the fields.
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, the meat and milk of the cow go through processing
method
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 by a machine. The third step is distribution, where the
food
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 products become prepared to be distributed by a truck. The truck distributes the
food
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in
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to
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twodifferent
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two different
places. One is to the restaurants, and another is to the retail. In the restaurant, the
food
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 is prepared to be served by
a
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the
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 restaurant staff.
Then
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 the
food
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 is consumed by the consumers of the restaurant.
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, from the retail
shop
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 the
food
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 is going to the houses and prepared for consumption in the house.
Then
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, the house consumers have it during their meal time.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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