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Because of the global economy, many goods including what we use as daily basis produced by other countries have to be transported for a long distance. What extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

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Transported
producet
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product
products
 can
be grow
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a
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an
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 economy. By transporting
system
 a
country
 can
benifited
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benefit
benefited
. It has many
advantages
 outweigh the
disadvantanges
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disadvantages
. I believe it has many
advantages
. There are a number of
advantages
.
Firstly
,
transporting
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transport
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system
 can
be develop
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 our economy. By transporting, a
country
 can taste another
countries
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country's
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food
. Many
food
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foods
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 are not available there. Imported
cloths
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clothes
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,
assosories
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accessories
, And
food
 are
people
 can buy easily. Transported
cloths
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clothes
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 and foods are present
a
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country
 by using these. It is very help them to buy. By transporting
system
, other
countries
people
 help to know about the tradition.
Secondly
, it can grow
a
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an
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 economic condition. Transporting method can build
relation
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relations
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 with
others
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other
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countries
. By transporting
system
, a
country
 can earn money and they can earn more revenue. It can help them to build strong bondings. Imported things can represent a
country
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country's
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 culture. So that other
countries
 can understand
to
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apply
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their culture.
On the other hand
, there are a number of
disadvantanges
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disadvantages
. One of the
disadvantanges
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disadvantages
 is that Imported
product
price
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prices
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 can
high
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be high
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 because imported
producet
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produce
 with included tax. Many
people
 can not buy
these
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this product
these products
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product
 because they have no ability to buy
these
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them
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. Poor
people
 can not afford these things.
Secondly
, by importing
product
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products
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, a
country
 can lose their local
cloths
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clothes
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 and local
food
. They can
be
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loss
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 their traditional dresses and traditional foods.
In addition
, Imported
product
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products
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 can pollute a
country
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country's
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 environment by using air, sea and
by
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apply
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roads. In conclusion,
economy
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the economy
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 can grow by
Imported
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Importing
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product
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products
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 and strong
relation
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relations
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 with other
countries
. It has lots of
advantages
 outweigh
disadvantanges
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disadvantages
.
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