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Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Othe people think that in today's world subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both points and give your opinion

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In
this
 contemporary era,
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 country on the earth, there is disagreement around the topic of paramount of teaching
history
. With regards to
this
 topic, few consider
history
should
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to be
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a major class in school;
while
,
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 other
assirt
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areas
 teaching
science
 and
technology
is
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are
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 more crucial. In
this
 topic, I will state
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both points and
inculding
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including
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may
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contend
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content
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.
To begin
 with, there are numerous factors that support teaching
history
 is necessary in school. First and foremost,
history
 helps people to learn about
legand
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legend
 heroes and how they
gave
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made
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a
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sacrific
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sacrifices
 to protect their country.
Therefore
, residents
alway
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always
 remember and
proud
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are proud
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on
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of
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 their national heroes.
Consequently
,
Young
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the Young
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 generation gets
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a postive
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postive
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positive
 attitude from
legand
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legend
soliders
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soldiers
.
Likewise
,
history
 teaches the importance of culture and traditions. Many individuals stay connected with their
nation
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nation's
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 culture and
ritual
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rituals
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 when they have knowledge about their cultural
history
. For
instace
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instance
, a recent survey conducted by Time News of India indicates that
history
 is
major
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sucbject
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subject
 in Punjab state;
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notwithstanding
 with condition students are more connected with their Punjabi culture as
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compare
compared
 to other states in India.
On the other hand
, teaching
science
 and
technology
 is
also
a
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 essential part
in
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 schools.
Firstly
, in
this
 modern era, everything is
computerlized
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computerised
;
this
 it is important students should
have
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 more active
about
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in
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technology
.
Moreover
, nowadays, many alarming
problem
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problems
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 are happening
such
 as global
warning
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warming
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 and
seroius
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serious
 diseases.
Science
 is
a
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an
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 important subject to control these dangerous concerns.
For example
, an article written by the University of New York states that the demand
of
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for
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science
 and
technology
 subjects
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increased in New York schools by 12% in 2019. In a nutshell,
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opinion
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, there is no doubt
science
 and
technology
plays
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play
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 a vital role in
human's
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human
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 life,
however
, having a balance between
science
 and
science
 subjects is more important.
Because
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history
 helps us to connect with
out
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our
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 roots and
science
teach
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teaches
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 us to live in
modern
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the modern
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 world.
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language grammar
Work on grammatical accuracy and word choice to make your writing clearer. For instance, there are several typos and errors like 'legand' instead of 'legend,' 'contend' instead of 'contention,' and 'computerlized' instead of 'computerized.'
coherence
Ensure topic sentences clearly introduce the main idea of each paragraph, and transitions between points can be smoother.
task achievement
Provide more in-depth analysis or evaluation of the points made. Currently, the points are present, but they could be further elaborated.
coherence
The essay includes an introduction and conclusion, helping guide the reader.
task achievement
You provided relevant examples, like the survey conducted by Time News of India, to support your arguments, which enhances the essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • insights into
  • past events
  • comprehensive understanding
  • informed citizenship
  • appreciate different cultures
  • critical thinking skills
  • analyzing sources
  • globalized world
  • contextualize current events
  • global challenges
  • advancement and innovation
  • fast-evolving
  • digital world
  • improved quality of life
  • analytical skills
  • problem-solving skills
  • career development
  • technological literacy
  • digitalization
  • automation
  • transform industries
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