It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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From my point, it is really important for children to learn the

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early age and sometimes

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so early need to learn the

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emotional

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character

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really fast, they need to be planted

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knowledge of the

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can develop their brain,

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wrong. If

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plant

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that from

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an early age, it will develop

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it really necessary to give

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? Yes, because if we teach them only by Theory and without application or example, they will feel easy on

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matter. We need to see if the

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really can make the

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and wrong. If they can, we need to give them

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so that they can think about something

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feel responsible and don't want to make the same mistake. After the

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can develop critical thinking, responsibility, and better

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. The sort of

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that

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to be given or not interact with the

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until the

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matter, it was my little cousin. My little cousin never

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an education about the

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and wrong so he is really annoying and a bad kid but in the meantime when their parents

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to develop really well, leaving the bad stuff and developing something really good about his

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Coherence/Cohesion

Strengthen the logical flow by organizing ideas into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should cover a single main point, supporting the overall essay structure.

Task Achievement

Make sure to address all parts of the task equally, including what types of punishment are appropriate. This will result in a more complete response.

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Provide more specific examples to support your points, which can enhance the argument and make it more convincing.

Coherence/Cohesion

Clarify your main points with clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to guide the reader through your argument.

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The essay has a clear stance on the importance of teaching children the difference between right and wrong.

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You included a personal example to illustrate your point, which adds a personal touch to the argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

punishment
positive reinforcement
consequences
time-outs
removal of privileges
open communication
clear expectations
consistency
fairness
disciplinary action
proportionate
moral values
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People now have the freedom to work and live anywhere in the one world due to the development of communication technology and transportation.

Children should be allowed to make decision on their own. Discuss bothe the views and give opinion.

Many men and women are making the decision to have children later in life. Why is this trend occurring? What are the impacts of this development on both family and society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

The increasing housing problem in big cities has social consequences. Some people say that only government can solve this problem? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

7.Some people believe educational qualifications always bring success. Others think educational qualifications do not necessarily bring success. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.