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The map illustrates the main developments in the town of Springer from 1970 until the present time. Overall, a multitude of arrangements and amenities changed the city's landscape in aforementioned fifty-year period. First of all, we notice that diverse facilities were developed at the expense of the wide forest. A school has been risen et the centre town with lots of shops all around. At the top right hand corner, an aeroport has been constructed, near a small portion fo forest and some flates.The huge farmland habe been shortned to a small area to let the place to other appartement and a house. FURTHERMORE there are much more roads between buildings than in 1970. However we can still notice some green space from the past forest, specially a band of forest at the west town.

The map illustrates the main developments in the town of Springer from 1970 until the present time. Overall, a multitude of arrangements and amenities changed the city's landscape in aforementioned fifty-year period. First of all, we notice that diverse facilities were developed at the expense of the wide forest. A school has been risen et the centre town with lots of shops all around. At the top right hand corner, an aeroport has been constructed, near a small portion fo forest and some flates.The huge farmland habe been shortned to a small area to let the place to other appartement and a house. FURTHERMORE there are much more roads between buildings than in 1970. However we can still notice some green space from the past forest, specially a band of forest at the west town.
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The map illustrates the main developments in the town of Springer from 1970 until the present time.
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, a multitude of arrangements and amenities changed the city's landscape in
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 fifty-year period. First of all, we notice that diverse facilities were developed at the expense of the wide
forest
. A school has been risen
et
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 the centre
town
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 with lots of shops all around. At the top
right hand
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 corner, an
aeroport
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airport
 has been constructed, near a small portion
fo
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forest
 and some
flates
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flats
plates
.The huge farmland
habe
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has
 been
shortned
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shortened
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 to a small area to
let
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 the place to
other
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appartement
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apartment
 and a house.
FURTHERMORE
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 there are much more roads between buildings than in 1970.
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 we can still notice some green space from the past
forest
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specially
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 a band of
forest
at
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 the
west
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 town.
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