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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The
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bar chart indicates the
rate
 of men and women from Australia who were involved in five different levels of post-education credentials in the year
of
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1999.
Overall
, there were five categories of certifications among which the
rate
 of male participants was the highest for
Skilled
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the Skilled
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 Vocational
Diploma
 category
whereas
 the lowest portion of
male
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males
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 participated in
Undergraduate
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the Undergraduate
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Diploma
. In
case
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the case
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 of
female
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females
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, the percentage was the highest
in
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for
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 Undergraduate
Diploma
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Diplomas
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 but the lowest one was
from
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for
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Skilled
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the Skilled
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 Vocational
Diploma
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Diplomas
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. It can be mentioned that male participants were involved mostly in
Skilled
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the Skilled
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 Vocational
Diploma
 with a value of 90%.
Conversely
, only 10%
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of female
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female
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females
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 participated
on
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in
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 that qualification. 70%
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of female
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female
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females
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made them
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were
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 educated
in
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with
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Undergraduate
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an Undergraduate
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Diploma
 and reversely the
rate
 was 35% for men. The second highest
rate
 for men was 70%
in
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for
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 Postgraduate
Diploma
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Diplomas
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 and for
women
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women,
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 it was 50%
in
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for
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Bachelor's
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a Bachelor's
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 Degree.
In
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For
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 Masters
Degree
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Degree,
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 the
rate
 was 60% for male and 40% for female candidates. In
Postgraduate
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the Postgraduate
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Diploma
 30%
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of female
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female
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females
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made them
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were
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 educated and
in
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for
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Bachelor's
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the Bachelor's
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 Degree 45%
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of male
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male
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males
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 took part.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, diploma with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • post-school qualifications
  • gender disparity
  • representation
  • overshadow
  • notable
  • predominantly
  • overall trend
  • significant
  • minimal gap
  • participation
  • comparison
  • qualification levels
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