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The bar graph illustrates the frequency with which Americans ate at fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Overall, the majority of Americans consumed fast food between once a week and once or twice a month during this period. Looking more closely at the data, in 2003, just over 30% of Americans ate fast food once a week, while around 30% did so once or twice a month. A small minority either never ate fast food or consumed it daily. By 2006, there was a slight increase in the percentage of people eating fast food once a week, as well as a growth in the number of those who ate fast food several times a week, rising from around 16% to 20%. The percentage of people eating fast food once or twice a month also increased. Meanwhile, only about 3% of Americans were daily fast food consumers during this period. Finally, in 2013, around 33% of people ate fast food once or twice a month, while a small portion of the population continued to consume fast food every day or never.

The bar graph illustrates the frequency with which Americans ate at fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Overall, the majority of Americans consumed fast food between once a week and once or twice a month during this period. Looking more closely at the data, in 2003, just over 30% of Americans ate fast food once a week, while around 30% did so once or twice a month. A small minority either never ate fast food or consumed it daily. By 2006, there was a slight increase in the percentage of people eating fast food once a week, as well as a growth in the number of those who ate fast food several times a week, rising from around 16% to 20%. The percentage of people eating fast food once or twice a month also increased. Meanwhile, only about 3% of Americans were daily fast food consumers during this period. Finally, in 2013, around 33% of people ate fast food once or twice a month, while a small portion of the population continued to consume fast food every day or never.
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The bar graph illustrates the frequency with which
Americans
 ate at fast
food
 restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
Overall
, the majority of
Americans
 consumed fast
food
 between once a
week
 and once or twice a
month
 during
this
 period. Looking more closely at the data, in 2003, just over 30% of
Americans
 ate fast
food
 once a
week
,
while
 around 30% did so once or twice a
month
. A small minority either never ate fast
food
 or consumed it daily. By 2006, there was a slight increase in the percentage of people eating fast
food
 once a
week
,
as well as
 a growth in the number of those who ate fast
food
 several times a
week
, rising from around 16% to 20%. The percentage of people eating fast
food
 once or twice a
month
also
 increased. Meanwhile, only about 3% of
Americans
 were daily fast
food
 consumers during
this
 period.
Finally
, in 2013, around 33% of people ate fast
food
 once or twice a
month
,
while
 a small portion of the population continued to consume fast
food
 every day or never.
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