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The bar graph illustrates the frequency with which Americans ate at fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Overall, the majority of Americans consumed fast food between once a week and once or twice a month during this period. Looking more closely at the data, in 2003, just over 30% of Americans ate fast food once a week, while around 30% did so once or twice a month. A small minority either never ate fast food or consumed it daily. By 2006, there was a slight increase in the percentage of people eating fast food once a week, as well as a growth in the number of those who ate fast food several times a week, rising from around 16% to 20%. The percentage of people eating fast food once or twice a month also increased. Meanwhile, only about 3% of Americans were daily fast food consumers during this period. Finally, in 2013, around 33% of people ate fast food once or twice a month, while a small portion of the population continued to consume fast food every day or never.

The bar graph illustrates the frequency with which Americans ate at fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Overall, the majority of Americans consumed fast food between once a week and once or twice a month during this period. Looking more closely at the data, in 2003, just over 30% of Americans ate fast food once a week, while around 30% did so once or twice a month. A small minority either never ate fast food or consumed it daily. By 2006, there was a slight increase in the percentage of people eating fast food once a week, as well as a growth in the number of those who ate fast food several times a week, rising from around 16% to 20%. The percentage of people eating fast food once or twice a month also increased. Meanwhile, only about 3% of Americans were daily fast food consumers during this period. Finally, in 2013, around 33% of people ate fast food once or twice a month, while a small portion of the population continued to consume fast food every day or never.
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The bar graph illustrates the frequency with which
Americans
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 ate at fast
food
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 restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
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, the majority of
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 consumed fast
food
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 between once a
week
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 and once or twice a
month
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 during
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 period. Looking more closely at the data, in 2003, just over 30% of
Americans
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 ate fast
food
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 once a
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 around 30% did so once or twice a
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. A small minority either never ate fast
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 or consumed it daily. By 2006, there was a slight increase in the percentage of people eating fast
food
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 once a
week
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as well as
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 a growth in the number of those who ate fast
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 several times a
week
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, rising from around 16% to 20%. The percentage of people eating fast
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 once or twice a
month
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also
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 increased. Meanwhile, only about 3% of
Americans
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 were daily fast
food
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 consumers during
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 period.
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, in 2013, around 33% of people ate fast
food
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 once or twice a
month
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,
while
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 a small portion of the population continued to consume fast
food
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 every day or never.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words americans, food, week, month with synonyms.
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