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The diagram below shows the production of olive oil. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The diagram below shows the production of olive oil. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The provided process chart illustrates the seven types of olive
oil
 formations. It starts from the
agriculture
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agricultural
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 land and
last
Change the article
the last
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 step is storage and sale.
To begin
 with, in
initiate
Correct article usage
the initiate
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step
Add a comma
step,
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 the farmers pick up
oil
 leaves from the
agriculture
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agricultural
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 land. After picking the picked material goes into
rinsing
Correct article usage
a rinsing
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 process and in
this
 water is used. After Rinsing the stuff
go
Correct subject-verb agreement
goes
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 through
belt
Correct article usage
the belt
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 and
then
start
Correct subject-verb agreement
starts
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 smashing. Smashing is major a step and it gives two
material
Fix the agreement mistake
materials
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one is
Verb problem
:
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 olive paste and olive stones. Olive pastes
pack
Wrong verb form
are packed
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 into bags and bags have
hole
Fix the agreement mistake
holes
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 in
it
Correct pronoun usage
them
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.
Therefore
 bags go under
pressing
Correct article usage
the pressing
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 process.
Thus
 holes help to separate the
oil
 and water from
olive
Add an article
the olive
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 paste.
Finally
, the
oil
 formation is
store
Wrong verb form
stored
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 in warehouses
as well as
oil
 is ready for sale in the market.
Overall
, it can
seen
Correct your spelling
seem
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 easy there are various steps for the production of olive
oil
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words oil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Harvesting - the process of collecting ripe fruits, such as olives, from trees.
  • Rinsing - washing thoroughly with water to clean away debris or impurities.
  • Crushing - smashing or grinding something into small pieces or a paste.
  • Paste - a thick, soft mixture formed by crushing olives.
  • Pressing - the act of applying force to extract liquid.
  • Centrifuge - a machine that separates substances of different densities by spinning them rapidly.
  • Filtering - the process of removing impurities or unwanted particles from a liquid.
  • Bottling - packaging liquid in bottles for storage or sale.
  • Impurities - unwanted or foreign substances within a mixture.
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