The line graph shows how much money overseas visitors spent in the UK from 1980 - 2010 and the pie charts show the reasons for their visits in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
Both
line
graph and pie chart illustrate information regarding how much money Correct article usage
the line
were
spent by Change the verb form
was
visitors
and why in the UK from 1980 to 2010.
In regard to expenses Use synonyms
paied
by Correct your spelling
paid
visitors
, Use synonyms
people
spent almost 8000 Use synonyms
Use synonyms
millions
in 1980, Change to singular
million
then
it slightly Linking Words
decrease
in 1983 to reach its lowest with approximately 7000 Wrong verb form
decreased
Use synonyms
millions
. after Change to singular
million
that
it Add a comma
that,
continue
to grow Wrong verb form
continued
untill
it reached almost 9000 Correct your spelling
until
Use synonyms
millions
spent in 1990. Following that, it had a small decline in the next two years which Change to singular
million
return
to less than 9000 Wrong verb form
returned
Use synonyms
millions
. Change to singular
million
Then
it went up to reach its peak in 1997 with almost 12000 Linking Words
Use synonyms
millions
Change to singular
million
were
spending by Unnecessary verb
apply
visitors
. After Use synonyms
that
it had a fluctuated years with ups and downs.
Regarding the reasons why individuals were coming to the UK in these periods of time. In 1980, Add a comma
that,
people
Use synonyms
came
for holiday were 44 per cent Correct pronoun usage
who came
while
Linking Words
bussiness
and visiting relatives Correct your spelling
business
come
second and third with 20,7% and 18,7%. Wrong verb form
came
Others
reasons why Correct quantifier usage
Other
visitors
came to Use synonyms
UK
were the least one in 1980 with 16.6 per cent. Correct article usage
the UK
However
, there was a chance in the Linking Words
proprtion
of Correct your spelling
production
thser
figures in 2010. Correct your spelling
these
those
their
people
Use synonyms
came
for vacation Correct pronoun usage
who came
were
decreased Unnecessary verb
apply
while
Linking Words
Use synonyms
people
who Correct article usage
the people
come
for Wrong verb form
came
bussiness
Correct your spelling
business
were
increased. Visiting friends and relatives had a significant increase with almost 10 Unnecessary verb
apply
pwe cent
more in 2010.Correct your spelling
per cent
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, people, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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