The line graph shows how much money overseas visitors spent in the UK from 1980 - 2010 and the pie charts show the reasons for their visits in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The line graph shows how much money overseas visitors spent in the UK from 1980 - 2010 and the pie charts show the reasons for their visits in 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
Both
line
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graph and pie chart illustrate information regarding how much money
were
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spent by
visitors
and why in the UK from 1980 to 2010. In regard to expenses
paied
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paid
by
visitors
,
people
spent almost 8000
millions
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million
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in 1980,
then
it slightly
decrease
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decreased
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in 1983 to reach its lowest with approximately 7000
millions
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million
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. after
that
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that,
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it
continue
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continued
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to grow
untill
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until
it reached almost 9000
millions
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million
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spent in 1990. Following that, it had a small decline in the next two years which
return
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returned
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to less than 9000
millions
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million
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.
Then
it went up to reach its peak in 1997 with almost 12000
millions
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million
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were
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spending by
visitors
. After
that
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that,
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it had a fluctuated years with ups and downs. Regarding the reasons why individuals were coming to the UK in these periods of time. In 1980,
people
came
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who came
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for holiday were 44 per cent
while
bussiness
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business
and visiting relatives
come
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came
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second and third with 20,7% and 18,7%.
Others
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Other
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reasons why
visitors
came to
UK
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the UK
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were the least one in 1980 with 16.6 per cent.
However
, there was a chance in the
proprtion
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production
of
thser
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these
those
their
figures in 2010.
people
came
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who came
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for vacation
were
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decreased
while
people
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the people
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who
come
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came
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for
bussiness
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business
were
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increased. Visiting friends and relatives had a significant increase with almost 10
pwe cent
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per cent
more in 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, people, millions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • steady increase
  • fluctuations
  • overseas visitors
  • significant rise
  • primary reasons
  • pie charts
  • holiday visits
  • business trips
  • visits to friends and relatives
  • expenditure
  • travel options
  • economic factors
  • tourism marketing strategies
  • global travel priorities
  • proportions
  • changing
  • correlate
  • reflect
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