Write a letter to your friend about a job opportunity you came across that they might find interesting. In your letter, you should: - give some details about the job -mention how came across the job opportunity -explain why you feel the job would be suitable for your friend

#friend #job #opportunity #-mention #-explain

Hi John, Hope you are doing

good

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. I

have remembered

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remember

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that you told me

about

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apply

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that you are seeking for job in computer stream

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which you have pretty good prior experience. I know one position is open at TDC company fortunately they are

also

looking for

Consultant

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a Consultant

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role who has good knowledge about Team management and

handlining

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handling

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clients. Actually, I generally keep an eye on investing some amount of time on LinkedIn to explore what is happening

around

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around me

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. Since I have

premium

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a premium

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account will be notified with job notifications. I saw that there is an open position at ABC company for

consultant

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a consultant

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role and

tech

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the tech

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stack is JAVA.

Moreover

, since you have

well

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apply

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experience with

required

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the required

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technology and

skill

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skills

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, thought would be

best

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the best

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fit for you.

Also

, preferably you are willing to have

remote

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a remote

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work system fortunately ABC company is open to work from

home

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work-from-home

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option. Think about it and let me know, one of my

friend's

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friends

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is working in that firm, if interested can refer

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you to

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the position. Looking forward to

hear

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hearing

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from you! Best Regards, Swathi Mutra.

Submitted by swathi.neni1913 on Tue Oct 08 2024

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Coherence and Cohesion

Clarify the company name where the job opportunity is available, as it is inconsistent (TDC vs ABC).

Coherence and Cohesion

Improve paragraph structure by clearly separating ideas and providing a more logical flow to the letter.

Coherence and Cohesion

Ensure all details are coherent and consistently refer to the correct company and job details.

Task Achievement

Friendly and encouraging tone, suitable for informal communication with a friend.

Task Achievement

Includes all necessary elements of the task: job details, source of information, and why the job is suitable.

Coherence and Cohesion

Good engagement and closing remarks add a personal touch to the letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

180 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

6.5

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

7.5

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Write a letter to your friend about a job opportunity you came across that they might find interesting. In your letter, you should: - give some details about the job -mention how came across the job opportunity -explain why you feel the job would be suitable for your friend

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the causes of this?

Fast food advertisements can be found on TV and throughout social media, which tempts people to eat unhealthy food. Should fast food ads be banned

in some countries more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or buliding they live in. what are the reason for this? how can people research this?

Universities should take the same number of men and women in each major. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?