The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart
illustrate
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information about the aims of
water
usage
in 6 regions of the world.
Overall
, South
America
, Africa, Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
use
water
for irrigation that
are
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the most popular. Meanwhile, the
purpose
of industry accounts
the
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most proportion in North
America
and
Europe
. First and foremost, the amount of
water
for different
target
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are
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similar in North
America
and
Europe
. Both
of
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areas consume
water
the most
common
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for
industial
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industrial
use
at 48% in North
america
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and 53% in
Europe
.
Moreover
, agricultural
usage
ranks second in total
water
usage
in North
America
and
Europe
at 39% and 32% respectively.
While
,
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the rest
purpose
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accounts
less
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than Industrial
use
about 3,5 times. On the other
hands
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, Irrigation is the main
purpose
of
water
usage
in Africa, Central
Asia
,
South
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and South
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East
Asia
above 80%. Using
water
for the aim of
aggriculture
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agriculture
and domestic is negligible in the above regions, which is about 7 to 9% with domestic and 5 to 12% with industry.
Last
but not least, South
America
is a region, which
consume
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water
for irrigation is the most popular
purpose
at 71%. Domestic
use
and Industrial
use
are
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and one seventh respectively of agriculture.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, usage, america, asia, use, purpose, europe with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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