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The plans below show the layout of the ground floor of a museum in 1990 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two plans below show modifications to the ground floor of a museum made in 1990 and  2010. The most significant change was to the northern part of the
room
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, where  the  Archaeology gallery was replaced by two areas, named
Children’s
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the Children’s
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 interactive zone and
Poster
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the Poster
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 display area, separated by a wall.
Moreover
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, a café was included in the gift shop in 2010, located in the western part of the ground floor.  
Also
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, a lift was built between the Natural History
room
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 and the Gift shop with a café. Another noticeable alteration is that the statue was moved from the western part to the
center
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centre
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 of the
room
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. The reception gallery in 1990 stood right near the Museum office,
while
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 in 2010 it was positioned diagonally. The entrance was enlarged in 2010, replacing the wall near the Local history
room
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, which 
remained
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had remained
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 the same since 1990. Stairs stay the same as in 1990. 
Overall
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, a number of huge alterations were made to the ground floor of the museum in the period from 1990 to 2010.

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Start with a short overview that gives the two or three biggest changes. For example, say that the north side was divided into two new areas, visitor services were added, and the entrance area became more open.
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Make sure every change is fully clear. The sentence about the reception area is hard to understand: explain exactly where it was in each plan and what “positioned diagonally” means.
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Use the plan names in a clear way. Write “the gift shop, which also had a café in 2010” rather than “the Gift shop with a café”.
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Avoid strong words like “huge alterations” unless the plan clearly shows very large change. “Several changes were made” is safer and more exact.
coherence and cohesion
Group information by area of the museum. One paragraph can describe the north side, and another can describe the west, centre, and entrance. This will make the report easier to read.
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Use fewer linking words when they do not add meaning. Some short sentences can be joined with “while”, “whereas”, or “in contrast” to show direct comparison.
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Keep the same form for place words. For example, use “in the western part”, “in the centre”, and “in the northern part” throughout.
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End with a more useful overview. Do not only say that many changes happened; state the main pattern of change, such as more areas for visitors and a change in the north of the museum.
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You report many of the main changes, such as the new children’s area, poster area, café, lift, and larger entrance.
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You also compare the two years and say which parts did not change, including the local history room and the stairs.
coherence and cohesion
The answer has a clear order: it starts with the north, then moves to the west and centre, and ends with an overall statement.
coherence and cohesion
Words such as “Moreover”, “Also”, and “Overall” help the reader follow the changes.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • exhibition space
  • gallery rooms
  • visitor facilities
  • accessibility
  • redesign
  • expansion
  • administrative areas
  • staff-only areas
  • gift shop
  • entrance
  • lobby area
  • restrooms
  • cafes
  • improvements
  • access areas
  • ground floor
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