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The maps below show the changes that have taken place in Meadowside village and Fonton, a neighbouring town, since 1962.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place in Meadowside village and Fonton, a neighbouring town, since 1962.
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The given picture describes the infrastructure development of
Meadowside
village
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Village
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 and
Fonton
 from 1962 to the present.
Overall
, the city has undergone significant transformations in housing, infrastructure, and facilities over the given period. The most noticeable change to the two
town
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towns
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 are both of them merged together in the present day. At
first,
the two cities are separated from each other
on
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in
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 1962. The changes started
on
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in
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 1985
where
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when
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Meadowside
village
 connected to
Fonton
 with a road to there. New places
built
Add a missing verb
were built
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 in the
Meadowside
village
such
 as a road going to the north
wich
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which
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 separated
Housing
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the Housing
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 estate and Superstore.
Also
 a leisure complex in front of the housing estate. On
other
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the other
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 hand, a railway in
Fonton
keeps
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is kept
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 in the same way
like
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as
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 before. In
current
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the current
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 condition,
the
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apply
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Meadowside
village
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Village
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change
Wrong verb form
changed
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 their name
into
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to
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 Meadow
suburbs
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Suburbs
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where
Correct word choice
which
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 merged
to
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with
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Fonton
.
Besides
 that, a new business park in the bottom middle of the road connected the two cities. There are
also
 new
hotel
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hotels
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 and
station
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stations
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faced
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facing
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 each other in the middle of maps. A new railway
added
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was added
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 to
connected
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connect
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 with the old railway so that the train
can
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could
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 go to the new station.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words meadowside, village, fonton with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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