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The graph compares the percentage of international students and the percentage of UK learners gaining second class degrees or better at a major UK university.

The graph compares the percentage of international students and the percentage of UK learners gaining second class degrees or better at a major UK university.
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The bar chart illustrates the difference between the percentage of foreign and local
students
 gaining
second class
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 or above degrees at a major UK university.
Overall
, it can be noticed that
highest
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 percentage of international learners
are
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chose Information Technology
while
 sociology is the most chosen for British
students
. Regarding the
oversea
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students
, more than 80% of them chose Information Technology as their field of study and Electrical Engineering Engineering is the second most chosen with almost 80% contribution.
Next,
nursing contributes highly with roughly 76%, following Art History by 70% meanwhile Sociology and English Literature had shared presumably 65%.
Moreover
, International Law
students
 had the lowest rate of almost 50%.
On the other hand
, Sociology and Art History had the highest percentage of almost 80% for UK
students
.
Then
, Nursing and English Literature
was
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 the next high contributing degrees for British
students
 with about 75%. In comparison to International
students
, International Law had one of the highest percentages, 70%,
while
 Electrical Engineering and Information Technology as being the lowest
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with 60% and 57%.
However
, Accountancy shared the same rate of almost 60% with International
Students
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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